I found the narrative unsatisfactory. The plot is so nonsensical that it comes across as surreal, and during the brief five minutes I played, I was left with numerous questions regarding the storyline.
What was the protagonist doing in the woods? Why did he decide to jump into a portal? How does he just calmly accept that he is in another world, alone and with dubious chances of returning? Why did the institute accept him from the beginning? What criteria led them to conclude that this random individual is special merely because he arrived in their realm? Could he not have discovered it by accident? What prompted Lyra to specifically take the main character under her wing? Additionally, why is the pacing so rapid that very little is explored or explained?
The entire piece appears to be written amateurishly. The author would benefit from a better understanding of the principles of writing.
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I found the narrative unsatisfactory. The plot is so nonsensical that it comes across as surreal, and during the brief five minutes I played, I was left with numerous questions regarding the storyline.
What was the protagonist doing in the woods? Why did he decide to jump into a portal? How does he just calmly accept that he is in another world, alone and with dubious chances of returning? Why did the institute accept him from the beginning? What criteria led them to conclude that this random individual is special merely because he arrived in their realm? Could he not have discovered it by accident? What prompted Lyra to specifically take the main character under her wing? Additionally, why is the pacing so rapid that very little is explored or explained?
The entire piece appears to be written amateurishly. The author would benefit from a better understanding of the principles of writing.
Not bad I'm hoping for the next update
Ofc, next update will be in a few days and will have day 2 and much more!
I absolutely love this vn, i would love to see more. Btw, i love Zephyr. Congrats on your first project!
I agree, i would like it more if there was music or sfx, but its rlly good tbh
Thats what next update will have, polishing, bug fix, character sprites and music, so stay tuned ;)
haha, ofc there will be more ;)
For a demo it looks amazing
Doing my best :)
Hmm not bad not bad to start it's already good
Ty!
Well there is no bug for me and this vn is not that bad especially story ^^
I'm glad to hear that! I'll try to update soon!